This task 1 GT letter of complaint is to the head of a school about the noise made by children using a local recreation ground via the school.
Make sure you address the three bullet points and expand on each point.
Task 1 GT Letter: Complaint to a School Head
| You live near a recreation ground. A local school often brings pupils to the recreation ground to do sports, such as football and cricket, but recently this has caused some problems. Write a letter to the head of the school. In your letter: – explain why you enjoy living by the recreation ground – describe the recent problems at the recreation ground – say what you think the school should do Write at least 150 words You do NOT need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, |
Model Answer
Dear Sir or Madam,
I live at 25 Crescent Avenue, across the street from the main entrance to Deer Park where the students of your school often have sports practice and matches. I’m writing to make you aware of an issue that I have noticed with the last few school groups that I have visited.
Having lived by this park for the past 10 years, I’ve so enjoyed having access to safe, clean natural environments where my children can play, and our dogs can stretch their legs. The preservation of green spaces around the city is so important, and I’m glad to see groups of children enjoying the space as your students do.
Unfortunately, I have noticed that for the past few weeks, after the school buses leave at the end of the matches, there is a large amount of litter left lying around the sports fields. This includes the packaging from their prepacked meals, as well as water bottles, and sweets wrappers.
I would like to see the children continue to use the grounds, so perhaps the school could put a few large bins in around the sports fields, in addition to the ones the park has provided, as these don’t seem to be large enough for the number of students.
I look forward to seeing the school take action that allows the continued use of the grounds for their students, as well as the preservation of our beautiful green spaces.
Kind regards,
Mary Robbins
(245 Words)
Evaluation of the model answer
Task Achievement: Band 8.5
The letter addresses the issue clearly, provides relevant details about the littering problem, and makes a polite and constructive suggestion for improvement. The writer also emphasizes the importance of the park and expresses goodwill towards the school’s continued use of the space. The tone is polite and appropriately formal, with a strong call to action.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 8
The letter is logically organized, with clear and cohesive paragraphs. The progression from describing the problem to offering a solution is smooth. There’s good use of linking words and phrases, although there could be a more seamless transition between praising the park’s usage and introducing the littering issue.
Lexical Resource: Band 8
The vocabulary is well-suited to the context and includes a variety of expressions such as “preservation of green spaces” and “prepacked meals.” The language is formal and appropriate, though a few more sophisticated or varied phrases could be used to elevate the letter further.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 8.5
The grammar is accurate and varied, with complex sentences used effectively. There are no significant errors, and the letter demonstrates a good range of structures. Slight rewording of some phrases, such as “could put a few large bins in” (could be more formal as “could install additional large bins”), would make the letter slightly more polished.
Overall Band: 8.5
This is a strong letter that clearly addresses the issue with a polite and constructive approach. With a bit more formal refinement in vocabulary and structure, it would likely achieve an even higher score.
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