This is a model of an IELTS bar graph. The topic is team scores.
In a bar graph data is organized into columns showing the data. In this case, the information is over time so you have to use the language of change to describe the data.
Bar Chart with 3 Teams
| You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. |
Model Answer
The bar chart shows the scores of three teams, A, B, and C, in four consecutive seasons. It is evident from the chart that team B scored far higher than the other two teams over the seasons, though their score decreased as a whole over the period.
In 2002, the score of team B far exceeded that of the other two teams, standing at 82 points compared to only 10 for team C and a very low 5 for team A. Over the next two years, the points for team B decreased quite considerably, dropping by around half to 43 by 2004, but they still remained above the points for the other teams.
However, though team A and C’s points were lower, they were rising. Team A’s points had increased by 600% from 2002 to reach 35 points by 2004, nearly equal to team B. Team C, meanwhile, had managed only a small increase over this time.
In the final year, team B remained ahead of the others as their points increased again to 55, while teams A and C saw their point scores reverse and drop to 8 and 5 respectively.
(Words 164)
Tips about the answer
The largest or biggest data is not always the most important but in this case you should see that what stands out above everything else is the size of Team B. It’s much higher than the others throughout the period.
So in this case this is likely to be a good piece of information to select for the overview (the main trend of the IELTS bar graph):
It is evident from the chart that team B scored far higher than the other two teams over the seasons, though their score decreased as a whole over the period.
It is then important in your description to pick out the main features and make comparisons as you are told to do in the prompt.
What you should not miss as they are likely to be seen to be key features by the examiner are:
- The relative size of B over the other teams
- It’s steep drop over the first three years
- The sudden rise in Team A in 2004 and its steep drop again
The importance of Team B in this IELTS bar graph is highlighted in the first body paragraph, with detail on how it remained high and above the other two teams.
It is then pointed out how Team A and C’s points increased, especially A, then fell again, while Team B rose again at the end after falling.
So the IELTS bar graph picks out the key features of the graph and makes comparisons, which are important for a good score.
Comment about the answer
Task Achievement: Band 8
- The response effectively summarizes the main trends in the bar chart, with a clear focus on Team B’s dominance and the fluctuating scores of Teams A and C.
- Specific data points are provided to support the analysis, giving clear figures for each year and team performance.
- The task is well-addressed, but more detailed comparisons between the teams’ scores across different seasons could add depth to the analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 8
- The response is logically structured, with a clear progression from the highest scorer (Team B) to the changes in Teams A and C over time.
- Linking phrases such as “In 2002,” “Over the next two years,” and “In the final year” help to guide the reader through the information effectively.
- A slightly more varied use of cohesive devices would improve the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource: Band 7
- The vocabulary used is appropriate and generally varied, with phrases like “far exceeded,” “considerably,” “increased by 600%,” and “small increase.”
- There is some repetition, particularly of words like “points” and “teams.” More varied word choices (e.g., “score,” “performance,” “improved”) could enhance the lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 8
- A variety of grammatical structures is used accurately, including passive and active forms, comparative structures, and complex sentences.
- There are no significant grammatical errors, and the range of sentence structures is appropriate for the task.
- Further variation in sentence length and complexity could slightly improve the score.
Overall Band: 7.5-8
This is a well-structured and clear response that accurately summarizes the bar chart data. Minor improvements in lexical variety and sentence structure could further enhance the overall quality.
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